Tuesday, 16 April 2013

Success Criteria for Description Writing:

  • Separate our writing into paragraphs
  • Each paragraph includes a topic sentence            
  • We use a past tense verb agreement (he had, he played)
  • We use a variety of sentence types (simple, compound We include an introduction and conclusion
  • Include basic punctuation, full stops, capital letters, commas


1. Introduction
Who is this person?  What has he done?  Why is he famous?  Why is he a leader?

One or two sentences introducing the sub-topics.

2. Paragraphs:

born - country, place,
childhood memories,
started or inspired when you were young

3. Challenges
were there expected challenges?  
Who helped you?  
did you set goals to overcome?

3. Achievements
Advice for others to achieve,
Proud of
Strengths (what are they and how did you use them to achieve)

4. Influences
People from history,
what qualities did they have?
who inspired, motivated you

5. Future

Description writing

Thomas Alva Edison was an American inventor and businessman. He was the man who people say invented the lightbulb. Thomas Edison was a leader because he inspired others to come up with new ideas and started the evolution of the light bulb to what we know .

Thomas Edison was the youngest of seven brothers and sisters. His biggest challenge was having to work almost deaf. Thomas’s greatest achievement was the electric light bulb

Thomas Edison  was born on February 11 1847. He was the youngest of seven brothers and sisters.  When Thomas was five years old he went to a school in  Michigan, Ohio. He went to school for three months and then left because they said that he was not focusing on his work. But for Thomas the problem was that he was not interested in what they were teaching him. So after three months at school he left. After he left his mum homeschooled him. Thomas said that “Everything I have done I owe all to my mum. She believed in me and everything I could do”. If his mum had not taught him he would not have been able to do this.      

Thomas’s biggest challenge was having to work almost deaf. When he was 14 he contracted scarlet fever. The effect of the fever, as well as a blow to the head by an angry train conductor, caused Thomas to become completely deaf in his left ear, and 80-percent deaf in the right ear. After this he decided to learn morse code and worked in a Telegraph office.

Thomas’s greatest achievement was the electric light bulb. It is what gives us light without having to use fire. Thomas’s favorite invention was the phonograph. He also made Microwave motion pictures and many more inventions.

Thomas Edison's main influence was his mother and father. They taught him everything that he wanted to learn. They pulled together  just enough money to hire a tutor to teach him science and electronics.

Once Thomas was famous, Mr ford asked Thomas if he could possibly find an alternative for rubber. The tree that they used for making rubber did not grow in America. Thomas was close to finding a solution for this problem  when he died at the age of 83.

Thomas Edison was an amazing person and his inventions made our way of life possible today.

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