Mine first new Zealand birthday and Trip the light

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At St Church was started a concert called “Trip the light”.Every buddy  chose what they want from Art,Drama,Music and Photography.

I chose Music,because I like singing.We distracted during  29th 30th 1th 2th and 3th of May and the concert was on 5th of May at 5:30 to 7:00.The two song’s that we learned were called”Trip the light”and”We are all one”.I think they chose to make this concert,because they wanted the kids to learn something and at the same time to have fun.

At 2th of May was my birthday.The people at the Church made a party surprise for me and a cake.The cake was dilutions . My mum and my dad gave me there present at the morning. It was a phone ! I was so happy.

The next morning we went again at the Church. It was the last day of trip the light for practiced. I liked it, because I had the chance to meet more kids in my year’s and it was fun.   

My Holiday

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My heart was beating as fast as a racing car. When I woke up  on Saturday I said to myself i am versing my old rugby team” but I was really nervous because I never seen them for a long time. But my game wasn't until 11:30am. So we went to my brother’s game and it was at 9:00am so I had to wait there for a hour an  half. Then it started to rain so I got in my car then 5 minutes later it stopped. Then the game was over and I said” yes soon it is my game”.

Then I wanted to walk up to where I was playing then it started to rain again but it was worst then before so my dad came to pick me up then we went to where I was playing. But when I got there I was the only one there then I when I went on the field I was playing on to try to find some people in my team and there was only one then there was two and 3456 then all of us was there and we all wait for our couch and then he came so we all get ready then we had to break up into the backs and the froward so we had a little practice before the games started .

It was raining hard and we said “is that all you got” then it stop again. Our coach said that team A has to go to the field because we were playing. Then it started to rain again and then we all got craziy and I saw the team that we were playing and it wasn't my old team. it was another team but only one person was in my old team and he was really good. Then the the Referee said” are you ready” and we all said”YES!!!!!!!” then he blow the whistle and the the other team kick the ball and it went flying over our head and then it hit the ground.

And then other team was raining like a racing car to get the ball but we picked it up and that when we all were in the game and we all were tied in like about 10 mins after it started then one person in our team intercept and got the ball from the other team and he scored a try and we got the conversion so the scored was going our team was winning and then it was a tie and we were winning and then it is a tie and then we were winne and at the end they won and we were still happy because we were all happy even we lost and it was a really good game and it didn't matter if we lost our won.

And that is one of my favorite thing I did in the holiday.

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The day before the airport we went to our Aunty’s house because she lives closer to the airport then us. Once we arrived to the airport we said our goodbyes.

As we flew across Tokyo, we saw ligths flashing under us it was like shooting stars all over the place, it was beautiful. I went with my sister, Hana and my mum. We were so happy to be flying to Japan to meet our family.There was a screen in front of you so you get to watch movies, listen to songs and play games. After 8 and a half hours we finally got of the plane we were exhausted.

Since the fight went to Tokyo and our family was in Nagoya, we had to take 2 trains to get there. We went on the trains called “shinkasen” which is the fastest trains in the world, but once you go in it it doesn’t seem fast at all. Before we went on the train we ate dinner that is a japanese rice ball and a drink.

When we arrived at the Nagoya station, our uncle was there to pick us up to take us to his house. We unpacked everything and we unfolded our blankets which is on the traditional japanese mat called ‘tatami’ and fell asleep.

PF:Micheala:I like your writing, its interesting! Maybe add some more information on what happened on that day.

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7.5.13

My Recount   

splash! I was turning over the rocks to catch some tiny crabs which was about the size of my thumb.I took some more steps forward and the mud got more deeper.It was Sunday afternoon and we were at the beach called Mission bay. We were there with mum’s Korean friend and her sons which the name was called William {which is younger than me} ,his sister Jessica, my sister, dad and mum.While I was at the beach the rest of them were at the park. The most cool part on the beach was that in a small pond there was a flap and the black tiny thing came out and came back into the water. what could it be? So I tried to catch it but I couldn't see anything [except the big things such as rocks starfish]  in the water, in fact I felt it ! It felt slippery.

After I had fun on the beach I came by thumping to the park which had the massive playground.

I liked the beach.

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My holiday
“It  was hot down town,”. I knew it was going to be fun. We spent the whole day there.

First at my house we walked to the train station and then pay money for the tickets. It was me and my friend and my mum’s best friend.

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When we got into the train we had to sit and wait for our stop,Our stop was britomart.So we had to pay tickets agian when we just arrived at Britomart.,now we got to town it was so amazing. We walked around and decided to go on the ferry.

We saw Mountains and the harbor bridge and  we went to this place but i didn’t know we walked  

around and we saw bikes for hiring.

the owner said we can ride to

for an hour so we decided to hire them    for  25 dollars for it so it will be cheap!!!!!! sometimes we get tired because there’s big hills

you have to ride on and that’s tiring,  man!!!!!!!  we were   riding them for half an hour and we saw Rangitoto island,we  were  five minutes early when we came back.

      We went back into the ferry and it was around 5 o'clock and it    was very cold. We payed for our tickets at the machine, then we press Glen Innes so we had tickets to Glen Innes so we went into the train and there were no seats at all everyone was waiting to Glen Innes.

Once we got there we walked to my house  and me and my friend was playing game’s it was fun i had a great holiday.

Amazing Forest

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So nice and tall trees. I enjoyed the fresh air and the size of the forest. The forest was very wide. It was Saturday in the late afternoon. In forest  seem that me and my parents were alone. We just heard law hum of the bees. The weather was very nice was quiet and warm wind. It was season of the mushrooms. So we decided to find a mushrooms and have them for dinner.

We walked and moved the leaves but we didn’t saw anything just the bare ground. In a half hour after  we tried to find mushrooms but it was useless. This forest was not for mushrooms. When we give up looking for them we just walked and looked on trees and joyed of the wondeful view of the forest.      

When we already was in the car. I was amazed by the nature. I was little bit sad and disappointed because we didn’t find the mushrooms but it wasn’t last time. But of course I liked the forest and his beautiful plants.

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Recount plan: Mum and I got to clip and climb for a suprise to me.We climb some amazing walls.I see people conca the leap of faith and the big slide.

In my amazing holiday mum and I went and enjoyed ourselfs at clip and climb .Clip and climb is a rockclimbing centre with amazing walls like the wall in the dark. It was a suprise for mum to take me to clip and climb,we went there for an activity to do because I was boerd to death at home.

First we got to climb the glow in the dark wall,it was amazing.It was such a challenge that I failed a few times ,but then I was a fast as a cheeta going up the wall.The spinning lights on the wall was like the moon cutting through me as a silver blade.My favourite was the ladder because when I climbed up I lay back and fell backward on the line and glided like a bird.

The most amazing walls was the giant slide and the leap of faith.The giant slide took you up as long as you wanted to do it and you had to hold on to the bars and let go when you wanted and you whosshed , down the slide.I saw some people who apprehensively got out of shock.The big jump also made people apprehensively get out of shock.So you had to climb up the ladder and then you got to choose what you wanted to jump on.Many people chose the trapeze and fewer people chose the boxing bag.

I did not get to do any of these but what from I saw it was a FRIGHT!

Personaly to me it was a great expeirence for Mum and me.I waltz out very happy and wanting to go again.

Michaela's Peer Feedback: I highlighted one word there and check it if there's something wrong with it. I think that you've met the success criteria. I like your recount writing because you also put some onomatopoeia .

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