Thursday 28 November 2013

We should have stronger penalties for people who abuse animals


We should have stronger penalties for people who abuse animals!

Have you ever wondered why we have organizations like the SPCA? Have you wondered some owners abused their pets? Do you think that animals should be treated this way? Do you think that the old owners need a bigger punishment than a fine? Pets love to be to be around us, but half of them live in terrible and squalid conditions, being abused on a regular basis, and then, we there is no more use for them, dumped, on the side of a street, where workers for organizations like the SPCA find them, and take them under their wing until adoption. The original owner/owners don’t get a penalty except for a fine, that’s when they’re caught, and even that is small.  I think we should have bigger punishments for the injury the animal has sustained, something bigger than a fine.

When people buy an animal, the pet shop think it’s because they want a companion. Some people have the delusionary thought that because they have bought the animal, they have the right to do whatever they want with it, and then you wonder why they treat their animal cruelly and why the SPCA even exists. Then you go to the SPCA website and the are stories of animals that are underfed, injured, dumped and unwanted.

Some pets are underfed or don’t get essential requirements that we have, like nutrition, and are therefore living a terrible existence. Some are restrained, having to do everything in the same patch of dirt. Others are wounded and injured, so hurt that when the are dumped they are limping around towns and streets. More are dumped and left to meander around. The owners don’t get much of a penalty, unless you count a very small fine.

The punishment is usually done when the old owner is caught and actually differs in countries. In some places it is a short sentence in prison. In others it is a extremely small fine. Small punishments make it seem alright for someone to hurt their pet, then get away with it.

People may say that they’re just animals, they don’t have real feelings. That is not true. Animals, especially the kind that spend their time with humans, have feelings. they feel sadness when they are left out and loneliness when the can only interact with themselves.

Others may say that they store-bought items, we can do whatever we want with them. Again, untrue. They are animals, living objects with beating hearts that feel pain. They are changed beings based on what you do to them, you hurt them, they become cruel. Treat them with love and they will give it back.

We must have bigger consequences for people who abuse animals because it is cruel, uncaring and evil. We should look after them and care for them and show them respect. Dogs and cats have saved people’s lives before and now it is time for us to save theirs. We should increase the fines and lengthen the jailing period. We should stop animal cruelty once and for all!!


Diya C

Tuesday 19 November 2013

All About Fynn


Hello my name is Fynn and I am going to tell you about me.
I will tell you what I look like , What my passion is and my family.
I hope you enjoy.



I am 140 cm and way 20kg. I Have hazel  eyes   brown eye brows .
My skin color is tan. My shoe size is 2 ½  . I have two feet two eyes and one nose. I love my body it feels awesome.
I hate being sick all the time I don't like about my body.



My passion is to dance and  play hockey .   I played hockey in the A team at my old school and played for Canterbury grade five .
My two biggest achievements is being world number 3 in dancing and getting runner up in dancer of the year. I love my dancing friends like they are my family.
My team and dance friends are like my family .




My family are very sporty we've had three of our family in the All Blacks the black sticks and my uncle created the Silver fern. The people in my family are Mum Poua Kalina Ceryan  David Shane Kristy Tamati Tomas Liam Ros Garry Warren Lucy Ella Michel Mariea Edie Glenda Kirsty and Cheryl. My family are everything to me. I cant wait to have my next family outing.
Uncle tomas.





I love my self like I am an million are I love my family are like gold  see you next time. and love your family and friends.

and that all about me.

Thursday 7 November 2013

Daniel's Persuasive Writing

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Sentence Structure
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The Structure of the debate

Topic:
Should kids have consoles?

Lots of kids has consoles like Xbox 360 and PS3 and some of them don’t because consoles and games cost a lot of money,Here are some example of the prices.
A PS3 cost around about $329-12GB, $499- 500GB





an Xbox 360 cost around about $379-250GB and 4GB is for $269 to $299.
Both of these consoles cost a lot of money, If I would get these consoles It would take a very very long time to get it. Some. Some kids buys R16 and R18 games which they are not allowed to get. Sometimes their parents buy it for them so the salesman gives it to their parents and the kids could play inappropriate games like Call Of Duties and Horror Games.

So I think Kids have consoles but no R16 and R18 games.




Daniel

PS3 is better than Xbox 360

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PS3 has been one of the wonderlands for gamer. I have played PS3 and Xbox for a long time and PS3 was my favorite out of both . People buy PS3 more than Xbox 360 . You should buy the PS3 than Xbox 360 from my point of view playing on a PS3 and Xbox. PS3 is one of the cheapest console and that are really good for playing games. PS3 is owned by sony one of the trusted brand for TV, stereo, action cameras, cameras and everything electronics .


Is PS3 faster than Xbox that you can’t be certain on because it depends on how much GB you have. PS3 is has blu ray so you have HD if you watch a movie you can see like your were in the movies so people who love watch movie in HD. For PS3 you can have GB version than Xbox does for instance PS3 has 360 is max for Xbox 360 is the max so PS3 is faster and you can download movies videos and more. PS3 games have won Goty award, there most every won .


The controllers of a PS3 is rechargeable so you don’t have to buy battery every times your battery dies. For Xbox you need to new battery each time that it dies or you can buy a rechargeable controllers that would be more expensive. So you do save money too.     


That’s why I think  PS3 is better than Xbox 360.


BY Miduran

S.C
  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocabulary
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
  • Present tense


PLAN
Intro - School is very important…..
Reasons - learning, friends, give your parents a break
Conclusion - I believe….


Should we have to go to school 5 days a week?


You do need to go to school five days a week because school is very important. If you don’t go to school you won’t learn and you won’t be smart when you grow up and you won’t get a job. When you grow up and have children they might ask you learning questions and you might not know the answer,that will embarrassing. If you don’t get a job when you grow up you won’t make money if you don’t make money you can’t buy a house and a car. You will be really poor.


It shouldn't even be 4 days a week because it all adds up to a lot of days a week that you don't go to. Plus you wouldn't learn as much if you went to school 4 days a week than 5 days a week. It mustn't be 7 days a week because we need a break. Also you will find lot’s of friends at every school you go to. You must also give your parents a break because they always look after you every day and that's probably really hard work for them.


School is also really fun, if you spent your whole day at home every day of your life it  won’t be so fun because most people would be at school. Then you will get really bored.
That's why I think people should go to school 5 days a week. What do you think?



Wednesday 6 November 2013

Why should you buy an iPhone?

Persuasive Writing SC
Purpose: Make the reader agree with you, because you want something from the reader




  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocab
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
  • Present tense




The iPhone is the best phone,because first That iPhones battery last longer than other phones, they load pages and download apps really fast and it’s a phone, camera, iPod, game device, and mini computer in one phone.


The iPhone is the best phone because you can download iTunes. iTunes is much more than just the program that stores and plays your music. It's also the tool that lets you add and remove music, videos, photos, apps, and more from your iPhone. It's also where a number of settings related to what goes on your iPhone live. Needless to say, it's pretty crucial to using your iPhone.If your iPhone didn't come with iTunes pre-installed, you can get it as a free download from Apple.

If you want to use the iTunes Store or the App Store--and you must, right? Why would you get an iPhone if you didn't want to take advantage of its hundreds of thousands of amazing apps?--you need an iTunes account. These free accounts not only let you buy music, movies, apps, and more at iTunes, they're also used as part of iCloud, Find My iPhone, FaceTime, and many other awesome technologies on the iPhone.

Also in the shops there are really cool cases for your iPhone. (For boys and girls)






Now that you know what an iPhone can do how can you live without it?


                                    

Persuasive writting

Persuasive writing.
why you should quit smoking.
  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocab
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
  • Present tense

Smoking you know it’s not healthy for you but you still do it. Maybe because it took over your body and you can’t stop. All you know that it’s not healthy and you don’t care about your body. One question is alway in my mind why. Why don’t you care about your Body why don’t you care about what will happen after if you and kids why. You need to stop it all is can kill you and you don’t want that to happen don’t you. What will happen if you had kid’s and you died what will happen to them they won’t have a mum to look over them. Two when you smoke you are making the air worst for other people if you don’t care about your body but what about other people’s body because the smoke goes in the air and other people will breath and get sick because smoking and it can kill them. Three smoking sometime can get you fired because they don’t want people that smoke’s and spent most of their money on smoke and not help you family. You can harm other people around you and care about them. You can ask for help if you don’t know how to stop just go and ask other people and i bet you that they will want to help.

This is my story for why you should stop smoking.


Persuasive Writing SC

  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocab
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
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Why we should help world hunger  

Could you imagine being so hungry that you can see every little detail of your bones? What if you didn't have enough energy or nutrients to talk, or even walk? This is not a joke, or a pleasant position to be in. Stop world hunger. How would you feel if you were homeless and starving?

I personally think we should help people in Africa etc, because it would be a great way of giving back to the hungry. They do everything they can to get a little piece of food. Put yourself into their shoes. In developing countries, poor people approximately receive $1.25 a day or less. For the hours a day they work for, they get nothing in return but a single dollar, which they will probably spend on their starving families. So I think that we should do something about this worldwide epidemic. Donate to the starving families or you can help them by giving them food and education. Poverty is the main cause of hunger. If you donate one dollar it could provide them with a loaf of bread. As Gandhi said “There are people in the world so hungry, that God cannot appear to them except in the form of bread.

Poverty includes people's lack of resources, such as food, water, and even proper climate. Giving an unequal pay can also lead to poverty. The source of world hunger is poverty, and the source of poverty fails to care property. Many people in poverty get only one meal a day if they are lucky and that meal will hardly nourish them. Water is one of the lack of resources because you can’t grow any crops without water.

When you provide people with knowledge necessary you change them forever. If you help the people that are hungry will change their whole life and they will go in he right direction. It is your choose to help, it will give happiness to you and it will change their lives. So what are you going to do?

Why should people stop smoking.

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  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
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Why should people stop smoking.

Do you know what happens when you smoke daily?  Tar gets stuck on your lungs and makes it harder for you to breathe. Teens ages 12 - 17 start smoking when they see their neighbors setting a bad example for them.

People would assume that when you smoke it makes you more alert but what actually happens it ruins your personal hygiene. It causes symptoms like: Yellow teeth, Foul breath and also the difficulty of catching up with your friends in games or sports. You wouldn’t see an ad or a billboard for cigarettes or tobacco, but the companies who own them try their best to sell their product. They try to persuade you to buy it. They are actually setting a bad example for kids that are going to be adults soon.

Smoking is bad for you because cigarettes and tobacco kill hundreds and thousands of people every year. You know those rubber bracelets that were created to bring attention to different causes? The Campaign for Tobacco-Free Kids have created  red bracelets  with the number 1,200 on it. Do you know why it’s  1,200? That's the number of people who die each day all around the world because of smoking. The poisons or chemicals in tobacco can start lots of diseases like heart problems and sometimes cancer.

There is another disease called passive smoking. It can damage your body, and hurt other people around you even babies. Imagine this; A mother puts her baby down in her  cot and then go out to smoke leaving the door open. When she came back to check on her, she was dead because she had breathe in the air that was from the cigarette.

I believe that when you smoke, you can cause harm to other people too. After you have read this piece of writing, I hope that you are persuaded to stop smoking and to also persuade or show this piece of writing to whoever that you want to help.  

persuasive writing by Rosie and Reha

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Persuasive Writing SC
Purpose: Make the reader agree with you, because you want something from the reader


  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocab
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
  • Present tense


* Dogs are better than cats *
Dogs are better than cats because cats are lazy and dull. You can train dogs to become guard dogs and guide dogs. Dogs always keep you company and they play with you so you're not bored but cats just run away and don’t do anything. You can also train dogs to do tricks but its not that easy to do with cats.

You would love a dog, They are really cute and loveable. A dog can protect you because of their stealth and strength. Puppies always play and bark and like to have fun when cats just like to sleep all day. Buy a dog, its worth the money. If you like, you can get dogs for free on Trade Me, I would recommend it.

Cats are boring and scratch you when  you try to play with them and you can't teach them tricks. Basically you can’t do anything with them. I know that you will like dogs better than cats. Kittens are cute but puppies you can train dogs to be extraordinary animals but cats all you can do is cuddle but they smell bad some times, well at least they are cute.

Overall, dogs are better that cats, you can’t argue about it. One more thing, cats bully dogs, which is sad. Cats always sleep in dogs beds, mean right? Dogs are mans best friend.

Evil cat...

Bullying...



By Rosie and Reha
Persuasive Writing SC
Purpose: Make the reader agree with you, because you want something from the reader

  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocab
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
  • Present tense




    Why should you buy or save up for a horse or pony ?
    by Daniella


    Well you ride your horse or pony your friend can too, so you guys can hang out.

    So it is good for your brain because u are not on video games/computers.

    You can also buy different colored  stuff like saddles , bridles , brushes , groom box , feed bucket , halter and lead rope , covers , floating boat , trucking boots , bell boots , chaps , jodepers ,
    body protector , helmet , vests and lots of other stuff :)

    Also you can go to ribbon day and get lots of ribbon by
    the look , the trot , the canter . jumping and posture
    and the clothing and sometimes the gear .


    Before you go to a show you get to do the horses mane , tail and forelock if you want .
    Wash the horse and then put the cover on else your horse will get dirty because after your wash them and put them in the paddock they love to roll to keep warm.



    You can pay to do rallies at the pony club and graze there and joining fee . you do get certificates (highest to lowest ) A+ A B+ B C+ C D+ D .

    Did you know :
    Pony Club is a great way to make new friends and form a big bond this your horse/pony. Pony club forms in 30 countries worldwide.

    Cross country is a wonderful team work with you and your horse.
    If you are a eager cross country rider then you might want to get a bold and confident horse.