S.C
- Facts/reasons that support your argument
- Strong verbs
- Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
- Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
- Vocabulary
- Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
- Present tense
PLAN
Intro - School is very important…..
Intro - School is very important…..
Reasons - learning, friends, give your parents a break
Conclusion - I believe….
Should we have to go to school 5 days a week?
You do need to go to school five days a week because school is very important. If you don’t go to school you won’t learn and you won’t be smart when you grow up and you won’t get a job. When you grow up and have children they might ask you learning questions and you might not know the answer,that will embarrassing. If you don’t get a job when you grow up you won’t make money if you don’t make money you can’t buy a house and a car. You will be really poor.
It shouldn't even be 4 days a week because it all adds up to a lot of days a week that you don't go to. Plus you wouldn't learn as much if you went to school 4 days a week than 5 days a week. It mustn't be 7 days a week because we need a break. Also you will find lot’s of friends at every school you go to. You must also give your parents a break because they always look after you every day and that's probably really hard work for them.
School is also really fun, if you spent your whole day at home every day of your life it won’t be so fun because most people would be at school. Then you will get really bored.
That's why I think people should go to school 5 days a week. What do you think?
Jesse you did a great job on Punctuation and Spelling, because every single word was spelled right and all of the sentences makes sense. Here is a examples: If you don’t go to school you won’t learn and you won’t be smart.
ReplyDeleteI think you will need to improve Strong Verbs, because you did not use enough Strong Verbs like Brilliant instead of smart.
Hi Jesse,
ReplyDeleteI think your punctuation was really good,because you putted comas at the right place but at the some time you need more Persuasive words like instead of "That's why I think people should go to school 5 days a week. " you could have used "That's why people should go to school 5 days a week." Because you are trying to make them go to school 5 days a week.Great work!
Hi Jesse,
ReplyDeleteI think your persuasive writing was really good because you explain good facts that supports your writing like Also you will find lot’s of friends at every school you go to. I think you could improve on your organisation and add more paragraphs in the right place but overall you story told me why we should go to school for 5 days.
Great job.