Wednesday 6 November 2013

Persuasive writting

Persuasive writing.
why you should quit smoking.
  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocab
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
  • Present tense

Smoking you know it’s not healthy for you but you still do it. Maybe because it took over your body and you can’t stop. All you know that it’s not healthy and you don’t care about your body. One question is alway in my mind why. Why don’t you care about your Body why don’t you care about what will happen after if you and kids why. You need to stop it all is can kill you and you don’t want that to happen don’t you. What will happen if you had kid’s and you died what will happen to them they won’t have a mum to look over them. Two when you smoke you are making the air worst for other people if you don’t care about your body but what about other people’s body because the smoke goes in the air and other people will breath and get sick because smoking and it can kill them. Three smoking sometime can get you fired because they don’t want people that smoke’s and spent most of their money on smoke and not help you family. You can harm other people around you and care about them. You can ask for help if you don’t know how to stop just go and ask other people and i bet you that they will want to help.

This is my story for why you should stop smoking.

3 comments:

  1. You could improve on telling your audience how to stop smoking.I like how you explained what happens.

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  3. Your spelling was really good you spelt almost all of you words in you story correctly. Your language features are also really good you asked lot's of questions. You stayed in present tense and that is good, you used words likes is instead of was. You do need to improve on your vocab because some of your sentences don't make sense like, "Two when you smoke you are making the air worst for other people if you don’t care about your body but what about other people’s body"
    You actually did really,really well, nice work!

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