Wednesday 6 November 2013

Why should you buy an iPhone?

Persuasive Writing SC
Purpose: Make the reader agree with you, because you want something from the reader




  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocab
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
  • Present tense




The iPhone is the best phone,because first That iPhones battery last longer than other phones, they load pages and download apps really fast and it’s a phone, camera, iPod, game device, and mini computer in one phone.


The iPhone is the best phone because you can download iTunes. iTunes is much more than just the program that stores and plays your music. It's also the tool that lets you add and remove music, videos, photos, apps, and more from your iPhone. It's also where a number of settings related to what goes on your iPhone live. Needless to say, it's pretty crucial to using your iPhone.If your iPhone didn't come with iTunes pre-installed, you can get it as a free download from Apple.

If you want to use the iTunes Store or the App Store--and you must, right? Why would you get an iPhone if you didn't want to take advantage of its hundreds of thousands of amazing apps?--you need an iTunes account. These free accounts not only let you buy music, movies, apps, and more at iTunes, they're also used as part of iCloud, Find My iPhone, FaceTime, and many other awesome technologies on the iPhone.

Also in the shops there are really cool cases for your iPhone. (For boys and girls)






Now that you know what an iPhone can do how can you live without it?


                                    

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  2. Hi Vicky I like you story about why we should buy an Iphone but you need to work on using other words because you use the same word over and over agian

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  4. I think you did really well in persuading me and i also like how you put iphone cover pics to should the different varieties and you used your words at the right time in the paragraphs

    I think you could improve punctuation so you need full stops commas.

    great work

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  5. Hi Vicky you did well with your strong verbs like (could you live with out it?). You could improve on adding past tense.
    good job
    Caleb

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  6. Hi Vicky you did well with your strong verbs like (could you live with out it?). You could improve on adding past tense.
    good job
    Caleb

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  7. Your Punctuation is really good use use the fullstops and captils in the right place. I think you need to work on your Personal pronouns because i didnt see that much you could put some on like You will like the iphone

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  8. Hi Vicky,

    You used good grammar e.g crucial, needless. I learnt lots of facts about iPhone that I didn't know like, iTunes could take videos. You need to improve on punctuation because commas are supposed to have spaces afterwords. Overall, your story is interesting because of all the facts.

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