Wednesday 6 November 2013

Persuasive Writing SC
Purpose: Make the reader agree with you, because you want something from the reader

  • Facts/reasons that support your argument
  • Strong verbs
  • Personal pronouns (I, I’m, you)
  • Language features: rhetorical questions, adjectives
  • Vocab
  • Introduction, Arguments, Conclusion
  • Present tense




    Why should you buy or save up for a horse or pony ?
    by Daniella


    Well you ride your horse or pony your friend can too, so you guys can hang out.

    So it is good for your brain because u are not on video games/computers.

    You can also buy different colored  stuff like saddles , bridles , brushes , groom box , feed bucket , halter and lead rope , covers , floating boat , trucking boots , bell boots , chaps , jodepers ,
    body protector , helmet , vests and lots of other stuff :)

    Also you can go to ribbon day and get lots of ribbon by
    the look , the trot , the canter . jumping and posture
    and the clothing and sometimes the gear .


    Before you go to a show you get to do the horses mane , tail and forelock if you want .
    Wash the horse and then put the cover on else your horse will get dirty because after your wash them and put them in the paddock they love to roll to keep warm.



    You can pay to do rallies at the pony club and graze there and joining fee . you do get certificates (highest to lowest ) A+ A B+ B C+ C D+ D .

    Did you know :
    Pony Club is a great way to make new friends and form a big bond this your horse/pony. Pony club forms in 30 countries worldwide.

    Cross country is a wonderful team work with you and your horse.
    If you are a eager cross country rider then you might want to get a bold and confident horse.






6 comments:

  1. you need to work on your grammer like you isnt u its not a texts and you should work on your punctuation

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  2. I think you didn't need to put in that much paragraph and you should re-read it. I think the facts are good though

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  4. Hi Daniella,

    I like your introduction and conclusion. You have lots of facts about the types of things that you have to buy for a horse or a pony. Some of the things we need to buy is boots, vests, helmets and a saddle. You need better punctuation because you have spaces before your commas and your not supposed to have them. Overall, your story is pretty good.

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  5. Hi Daniella,
    I like how you have put in facts that support your argument like when you have said you can do horse riding instead of video games. You do need to improve on grammar for example when said u instead of you and also when you said You can also buy different colored stuff like saddles , bridles , brushes , groom box , feed bucket , halter and lead rope , covers , floating boat , trucking boots , bell boots , chaps , jodepers , body protector , helmet , vests and lots of other stuff :) what do you mean by other stuff. Great Work!
    - Aliyah

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  6. you did a great job on facts. like: body protector , helmet , vests and lots of other stuff :).
    You need to improve on punctuation, because some paragraphs does not start with a Capital letter. Like body protector , helmet , vests and lots of other stuff :).

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