24.6.13
WALHT write to explain
SC
- Introduction - Identifying Statement
- Explanation Sequence
- Conclusion - Summary Statement
- Punctuation/Sentences
- Individual Goal
Plan
- Intro
- Being sustainable with rubbish - what is wrong? What can we do?
- Being sustainable with fishing - what is wrong? What can we do?
- Being sustainable with shipping - what is wrong? What can we do?
- Conclusion
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How can we be sustainable around the ocean?
Sadly
people have been throwing their garbage in the ocean and on the beach.
When its on the beach and the tide comes up it washes to the ocean and
the our sea creatures think it is food, so they eat it, get sick and
die. What can we do to prevent this and help keep our ocean sustainable?
Rubbish in the Sea
people just dump rubbish in the ocean and on the beach. we need to tell people to stop.
Overfishing
People are over fishing. That mean’s we don’t have lot’s of fish and it is crell.What will happen is that people will start to lose their jobs because people are overfishing, like butchers need fish to sell and when theirs no fish they won’t have any to sell so that will make the money go down, and then we won’t have fish to eat anymore.
oil spill
there
was a oil spill that spelt because ships sank and they had oil and it
went all over the ocean and lot’s of fishes and other sea animals died .
it was really sad.
conclishion
people
have been throwing their rubbish onto the beach , and in the ocean.
also on the ground, and it is going killing the sea life animal’s and
they are dying. cause of our course . There was some ship that had oil
on then and the senked and our sea life animal’s dies. lastly when
people wash they car’s and the liquid in the drane and effects that
sea animals.
Great writing, Daniella! You have explained your thoughts very well.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing, Daniella! You have included a conclusion, intro, punctuation and sentence.
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